I think that the red text just destroyed the B/W style, I would've given you a 10 on style otherwise... The intro was boring and quite difficult, but it came into life somewhere at the point when you ditched that mirror image.
Overall it's quite decent. It can use a little bit more work, though, but quite decent. Yes, decent is the word. "Mediocre" would be an understatement and "perfect" would be an utter lie.
I don't know... it has potential, and it shines through, but you sort of hid it. I suggest that you dig up some other music video of the same sort and get some inspiration. This was good and boring at the same time.
Damn, now you got me confused!